an Aesop fable
A Kid was perched up on the top of a house, and looking down saw a Wolf passing under him. Immediately he began to revile and attack his enemy. "Murderer and thief," he cried, "what do you here near honest folks' houses? How dare you make an appearance where your vile deeds are known?"
"Curse away, my young friend," said the Wolf:
"It is easy to be brave from a safe distance."
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the boy who stuck his chest out too far
Inspired by the original Aesop fable:
The Wolf and the Kid
The Wolf and the Kid
A young boy climbed atop his roof in his boredom
He was a rude little boy with a little heart like a toy
plastic and only so alive
He wore some overalls
He climbed a lot to never fall
Like many boys he thought he was the man
A young buck amongst beast
In a forest he ran atop his two feet
But for the most part he climbed up tress and long vines
Tarzan he could be called
He might turn appalled
As he would say he was greater than that stupid jungle man
As you can see this youngster was kind of mean
Arrogant and full of childish ploys
He had a mouth on him
He was a rude little boy
As this boy was atop his roof he saw in the distance a thing
This thing had no mane
so no it was not a lion
but instead another fierce creature
On his four legs he traveled ever closer to the boy
He walked with a presence of beastly prestige
He was bold, fierce and a great beast
He was the rule in the forest on all he could feast
The boy shouted vile words to the wolf
Taunting a creature far more powerful than he
And with a fatal mis step he fell
From his mouth now only plea
He screamed and shrieked in horror
Trying to take back his evil words
He was no longer the brave boy with his chest puffed out
Rather more helpless than a little baby bird
The wolf charged the boy
Not another scream was heard
As the wolf clamped down on his jugular
From the boy to the ground, blood profusely transferred
Thou shalt not talk shit if thou cannot back it up
He was a rude little boy with a little heart like a toy
plastic and only so alive
He wore some overalls
He climbed a lot to never fall
Like many boys he thought he was the man
A young buck amongst beast
In a forest he ran atop his two feet
But for the most part he climbed up tress and long vines
Tarzan he could be called
He might turn appalled
As he would say he was greater than that stupid jungle man
As you can see this youngster was kind of mean
Arrogant and full of childish ploys
He had a mouth on him
He was a rude little boy
As this boy was atop his roof he saw in the distance a thing
This thing had no mane
so no it was not a lion
but instead another fierce creature
On his four legs he traveled ever closer to the boy
He walked with a presence of beastly prestige
He was bold, fierce and a great beast
He was the rule in the forest on all he could feast
The boy shouted vile words to the wolf
Taunting a creature far more powerful than he
And with a fatal mis step he fell
From his mouth now only plea
He screamed and shrieked in horror
Trying to take back his evil words
He was no longer the brave boy with his chest puffed out
Rather more helpless than a little baby bird
The wolf charged the boy
Not another scream was heard
As the wolf clamped down on his jugular
From the boy to the ground, blood profusely transferred
Thou shalt not talk shit if thou cannot back it up
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Author's Notes
My story is inspired by an Aesop fable named The Wolf and the Kid found in Myth-Folklore Unit: Aesop's Fables (Jacobs). In life many people talk a lot and do not prove their claims. We all know the cliches. Actions speak louder than words. Talk shit get hit. Talk is cheap. So on and so fourth. This story proves that moral. I tried a new form of writing by spontaneously adding some rhyme in my broken up passages. It was fun. Be dope.
I love that you broke up the passages in the ways you did. Adding the rhyming and the spacing made the story easier to read. The spacing also made the story easier on the eyes. It seems when stories are broken up into separate passages like this, even if they are longer than normal, it doesn’t seem that way. It is almost as if we trick out eyes into believing it is shorter. I really like your font color as well. It is more gray than black, and that also makes it less straining on the eyes. Overall, you are very good at writing, formatting, and well, everything it seems! Keep up the good work, you are doing great! I will be back to read more stories later this semester for sure! Your stories are relatable and funny. You don’t hold back in your writing and I like that. I focus too much on what others would want to read when in reality I should be like you and write more of what I like and what I feel.
ReplyDeleteI liked the formatting you chose for this story. It read a lot like a modern myth or folklore, so great job!
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I would say is that, I am not against profanity, however I didn't think the last line really went with the rest of the story. If you had used more slang and profanity before, maybe it would work better. But since it read like a typical fable, and then the end was quite different. That being said, it's your story, so take from this what you want.
I really liked how you changed up story by describing the boy as an arrogant and childish person. You expanded on the personality of the boy and I also so the rhyming in it. In my opinion you did a good job! I specifically dig the moral of the story because it is so true. Actions do talk louder then words.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite part of the story was the rhyme, it flowed well and was easy to read. I think you added a lot more to the story than what was originally in it, which made it more interesting. The original fable being at the top of the story helped me the most, and since it was a fable it was easy to read quick and easy so I had an understanding of your story. Your picture choice at the bottom was a good one, shows what kind of animal went after the boy. There should at least be a source as to where you go the picture, the link worked like it was supposed to. A personal preference of mine would have been for you to add a picture of the boy, just so we could get an idea in our head as to what this boy may have looked like. Overall good story, and good authors note at the end!
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